2024屆高考英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)書面表達專項練習(xí)11 青少年成長話題指導(dǎo)
實例指導(dǎo)1—青少年秘密2024屆高考英語二輪復(fù)習(xí)書面表達復(fù)習(xí)專題11 青少年成長話題指導(dǎo)
【寫作任務(wù)】
青少年也有很多屬于自己的小秘密。家長們應(yīng)允許他們保留一些私人空間。請根據(jù)下表寫——篇短文,指出家長的一些錯誤做法,并給這樣的家長提一些建議,使家長和孩子更好的交流。詞數(shù):120--150。
【思路指導(dǎo)】
1.思路點撥:
審題第—步:確定文體、人稱,這是一篇說理議論文,應(yīng)以第三人稱為主;
審題第二步:確定全文論點。從信息提示來看,全文的中心應(yīng)是批評家長的這些錯誤做法并且給這樣的家長提建議;
審題第三步:確定寫作要點。
2.選詞、造句:
①交流產(chǎn)生困難
have some difficulty in communicating
②偷看孩子日記
peep at their children's diaries
③不敲門就進入孩子房間
walk into their children's rooms without knocking
④私自查看孩子書包
look
through
children's
schoolbags without permission
⑤看別人寫給孩子的信件
read letters sent to their children
⑥家長應(yīng)明白:他們不再是小孩子了。
Parents should know they are no longer little girls or boys.
⑦為了更好地了解他們,父母應(yīng)設(shè)身處地為孩子們著想。
To learn more about their children,parents should remember what they did at the same age.
⑧更重要的是,家長還要尊重和理解孩子。
The more important thing is that parents should give them enough respect and understanding.
【參考范文】
Now
some
parents
have
some
difficulty
in communicating with their children.
Children can't understand what their parents have done.Some parents peep at their children's diaries:some walk into their children's rooms without knocking;some:look through their schoolbags without permission:others read letters sent to their children.Are these really good ideas? We are afraid not.Parents should know they ale no longer little
To learn more about:their children,parents should remember what they did at the same age.And the most:important:thing is that:
parents
should
give
them respect
;and understanding.
實例指導(dǎo)2—獨生子女
【寫作任務(wù)】
自從我國實行一對夫婦只生一個孩子的計劃育政策以來,很多家庭都是獨生子女,孩子嬌生養(yǎng),在家吃啥有啥,穿啥買啥而且都是名牌。請寫一篇120—150詞的英語短文來闡述一下一對夫只生一個孩子的利與弊、
【思路指導(dǎo)】
這是一篇開放性作文:這類作文的特點是只出主題,或兩三點提示,或一段素材,然后由考在此基礎(chǔ)上充分發(fā)揮想象力,
自由創(chuàng)作。開放性作文對考生的能力要求更高,考查也全面。它不僅查考生的書面語言表達能力、語言組織能力,而考查考生的邏輯思維能力、發(fā)散思維能力、豐富想象力,以及多角度考慮問題的創(chuàng)新思維能力。與控制性作文相比,開放性作文不僅擴大了命題的寫作的范圍,提高了考生的寫作興趣,而且把對考生的考查提高到更高、更新的層面上來。因此開放作文給學(xué)生提供了更廣的寫作空間,有利于培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的創(chuàng)新意識,同時也要求考生必須要思維活躍開善于發(fā)散思維,近幾年此題型常考的文體有兩種:記敘文和議論文。記敘丈就是要求考生根據(jù)給的材料,展.開充分的想象,拓展原材料,把整個事情表達清楚。而議論文要求考生對所給的材料進行分析,然后發(fā)表自己的觀點或看法。
突破開放性作文的方法如下:
子有利有弊。第二部分:分別介紹一對夫婦只生一個孩子的利與弊,我們可從以下幾個方面來考慮:①一對夫女;只生一個孩子有利于父母更好地關(guān)心照顧孩子,為孩子提供有質(zhì)量的服務(wù),然而父母這樣做要把握好度,過度的話就會對孩子溺愛。②減輕了他們的經(jīng)濟負(fù)擔(dān),另外,一對夫婦只生一個孩子容易造成孩子的孤獨和不能很好的跟別人吏往等問題。③總結(jié)再次闡明自己的觀點,做到首尾呼應(yīng)。
最后,要注意合理地分段,注意標(biāo)點符號的應(yīng)用、語言要流暢,上下丈過渡
【教師點評】
文章的亮點在于:
1.恰當(dāng)使用過渡詞:For one thing …for another,therefore,however,What’s worse等的使用使語意連貫,銜接自然。
2.表達自己觀點時用到了personally , I hold the view that …被動句single children may be more spoiled,原因狀語從句、定語從句、動名詞復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)以及1eave+賓語+賓語補足語leave the child less able m interact well with people of his or her own age.等的應(yīng)用在一定程度上體現(xiàn)作者較為深厚的語言功底,同時又十分自然。
但文章也存在不足之處:
1.有明顯的語法錯誤,如:第二段中的非限制性定語從句which make them more dependent on their parents.中的make應(yīng)改為makes,因為which代替的是前面的整個情況。又如:第三段開頭句子there seems to have some other problems這是there be句型的變型,所以have應(yīng)改為be。
2.文章結(jié)束得太突然,使讀者讀起來感覺好像后面還有內(nèi)容,最好再做個總結(jié)。
實例指導(dǎo)3-交友
【寫作任務(wù)】
假設(shè)你叫,你的筆友來信詢問關(guān)于如何交友的問題。請根據(jù)下面的漢語提示, 結(jié)合自身實際,給他寫一封回信。內(nèi)容包括: 1. 交友的重要性; 2. 如何交友:至少提三條建議; 3. 患難朋友才是真朋友。 詞數(shù)要求:120-150。 1. 仔細(xì)審題:在歷年高考中,英語試題中的書面表達題考查最多的應(yīng)用文為書信形式。而內(nèi)容有很多又是關(guān)于很多疑惑問題的請教或解答。本文寫作的中心是圍繞“如何交友”這個主題來展開,屬于議論文范疇,所以應(yīng)該使用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)來表述觀點,人稱上應(yīng)以第一人稱為主。
2. 提煉要點:
實際上,本篇習(xí)作的要點主要體現(xiàn)在在如何交友
3. 理清層次:
由于是說理性文章,脈絡(luò)一定要清晰,使人一幕了然,說服性強。為了保證層次間在意義上的連貫以及自然的過渡,適量銜接詞的使用在本文的寫作中是必不可少的。
4. 謀篇布局:
由于本文屬于一篇帶有勸勉性質(zhì)的說理性文章,因此要用過渡詞將上下文的邏輯關(guān)系體現(xiàn)出來。需要注意的是:使用上述過渡性詞必須根據(jù)上下文需要的原則,力求自然,決不可牽強附會,讓人感覺別扭。【學(xué)習(xí)習(xí)作】
Dear Li Jun ,
Glad to hear from you . Now I’m writing to discuss with you about how to make good friends.
As you know , everybody needs friends, so how to make true friends is very
仿照范文中的句子,將下列漢語譯成英文。
1. 為了早晨睡得晚些,鮑勃關(guān)上了鬧鐘。
2. 正如大家所知,地球圍繞太陽轉(zhuǎn)。
3. 如何穿過那個峽谷仍然是個難題。
4 .麻煩是我把他的地址丟了。她講英語比我多。
1.To sleep late in the morning, Bob turned off the alarm.
2. As is known to all, the earth moves around the sun.
3. How to get through the valley is still a difficult problem.
4 .The trouble is that I have lost his address.
5. She speaks more English than I do.
6. If he has found it, he will send it.
7. All flights have been put off
because of the snowstorm , so many passengers could do nothing but take the train.
實例指導(dǎo)4----Parents and Children
【寫作任務(wù)】
某英語報社開展以“Parents and Children'’為題的“看圖作文”征文活動,要求根據(jù)以下三幅圖用英語寫一篇作文,文章內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括:①4月9日發(fā)生在李華家的事情;②你個人的感受。請你寫一篇向報社投稿的征文。
注意:
1.詞數(shù)100左右,征文題目已給出,不計入總數(shù);
2.短文要求觀點明確,結(jié)構(gòu)合理,緊湊連貫。
【學(xué)生習(xí)作】
Parents and Children
In the evening of April 9,1 Li Hua was watching TV when his mother was busy preparing supper.2 Li Hua was so hungry that he began to complain about his mother’s slow.3 At that time, the telephone rang. She was a friend of her mother.4 She said to Li Hua today was his mother’s birthday. She wished her mother a good birthday. What a shame! Li Hua has forgot all about it.5He cares himself more than his mother.
At the story, I got deeply shocked. It is not easy for parents to bring us up.6 They give us
lots of love and care, while we don't care for them enough. Now it's never too late to realize
this and show our love and care for them.
山東省高青縣第二中學(xué)高三·一班
樊鎮(zhèn)鎮(zhèn)
【教師點評】
本文為一篇夾敘夾議的圖畫作文。習(xí)作者能抓住圖畫要點,將有關(guān)事件有機地聯(lián)系在一起。議論部分能切中時弊、有的放矢。既點出了李華這種行為的根源,又向社會發(fā)出了呼吁。說明作者有一定的社會洞察力和語言表達能力。從文中的錯處可看出,習(xí)作者犯的都是“小”錯誤。而小錯在一定程度上會影響英語水平的提高。若能突破這一點,習(xí)作者的寫作水平一定會有很大提高。
不足之處
1、把In改為On。在具體的一天的早晨、晚上要用on。又如:on the morning of Octomber1
2、把when改為while。此處表示兩種行為的對比。
3、slow 后加-ness,about后面應(yīng)接名詞。
4、a friend of his mother’s “他母親的一個朋友”
5、當(dāng)一個短語為“動詞+ 副詞”型,該短語的賓語又是代詞,這時代詞要放在副詞的前面。即bring up us 改成 bring us up。
6、時態(tài)錯誤:has改為 had。
【作文示范】
On the evening of April 9th, Li Hua was watching TV while his mother was busy preparing
for dinner in the kitchen. How attentive he was watching the TV program when the
實戰(zhàn)演練
假如你是一名高二的學(xué)生,名叫王寧,最近你很不開心,因為你和父母之間有一些爭執(zhí)。你想告訴你遠在英國的筆友Tom。根據(jù)以下提示的內(nèi)容寫一封書信,告訴Tom你的成長煩惱。
1.我的數(shù)學(xué)和語文學(xué)得很好,但是覺得英語和物理比較難。可父母卻覺得我每門功課都應(yīng)該是班級哩最好的。
2.他們不尊重我,經(jīng)常看我得日記。我放學(xué)回來晚了他們也很生氣。
3.我喜歡流行音樂,周末也想看電視。而父母除了學(xué)習(xí)什么也禁止我做。
4.現(xiàn)在我對學(xué)習(xí)都不感興趣了,請告訴我怎么辦?
注意: 詞數(shù):120左右。
Dear Tom.
These
days, I
feel
upset, because I don't know how I can get ong well with my parents.
At school I am good at maths and Chinese, while I find English and physics difficult to learn. But my parents think I should always do best in every subject.
Besides, they don't trust me at all . They often read, my diary, and whenever I come back late, they get very angry.
You know I like popular music very much, and when weekends come, am dying to watchffV for a while. However, I am forbidden to do anything except studying.
Now I am no longer interested in my study. 1 don't know how I can I ipmve it. Can you give me some advice?
Yours,
Wang Ning
目前,由于來自學(xué)校、家長、社會等方方面面的壓再加上繁重的學(xué)習(xí)任務(wù)和面臨高考激烈的競爭,學(xué)生體質(zhì)變得越來越差,這一點已經(jīng)成為社會關(guān)注的問題。請根據(jù)下列提示,以“How to Keep Ourselves Fit"為題寫一篇英文短文。
中學(xué)生現(xiàn)狀:
a. 缺乏合理營養(yǎng)知識,膳食攝人不平衡并且忽視早餐、挑食等;
.
b.運動量不足,青少年肥胖率逐年升高,肥胖癥(obesity)會引發(fā)高血壓、心臟病等。
健身建議:
a.保持平衡飲食;
b.多做有氧運動(aerobic exercise),如:散步、游泳、掎車、跳舞等。
注意:
1.詞數(shù):120—150;
2.可以適當(dāng)增添細(xì)節(jié),以使文章連貫。
How to Keep Ourselves Fit
Now students' health is a common concern.
High
school
students
bear much
pressure
with
heavy
loads
of school work and a fierce competition in the College Entrance Examination. And obesity
is
increasing
in
our
society because
of
unbalanced
diet
and nutrition.
Some
students
don't eat breakfast or are particular about food.
Another more serious problem is that some high school students in our country are obese or overweight, which can seriously affect our health. Obesity may contribute to other diseases, such as high
blood
pressure
and
heart disease.
So, as students, we should eat a balanced and nutritious diet. We should eat more vegetables and fruits. Besides, we should
have
proper
exercises, especially aerobic exercises .Walking ,swimming, cycling, and dancing are all examples of aerobic exercise.
持續(xù)火爆的“中國好聲音”比賽成為當(dāng)今人們談?wù)摰囊淮髸r髦話題。假定你是李平,你們班就“超女”現(xiàn)象進行了一場討論,以下是討論結(jié)果。請你用英文給一家英文雜志社寫一封信,把你們班的討論結(jié)果反映給報社編輯。
注意:1、詞數(shù)100左右,開頭為你寫好。
2、可適當(dāng)增減細(xì)節(jié),以使行文連貫。
3、參考詞匯:促進promote
崇拜 worship
偶像 idol
Dear editor,
Our class has recently held a heated discussion about the “Super Girls” phenomenon which was hot new in 2024. The students show their different opinions about it. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Ping
Dear editor,
Our class has recently held a heated discussion about the “The Voice of China” phenomenon which was hot new in 2024. The students show their different opinions about it.
62% of the students support it. They think that it provides a chance for those with talent for singing to show themselves. In this way, some new singers can be trained and so it can promote the development of music. And it can also improve their consciousness of competition.