考研英語復習資料考研英語作文范文的批改60

　　I am a senior from department of Computer Science,I am writing to you for applying for the position of an Internet administrator which your recently advertised.

　　I am sure that I can qualitied for it.First,enclosed with this letter is my resum,which further details my previous training and strength and working experiences.Moreover,not only do my qualitifications and experiences make me perfect candidate for it,my interactive personal skill and teamwork spirt are well suited for working as an Internet administrator.

　　Finally,I would be much grateful if you are so kind as to arrange an interview so that I could explain in more details in person the relevance of my educational background and working experiences.

　　yours truly,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madom(拼寫錯誤),

　　I am sure that I can qualitied(拼寫錯誤) for it. First, enclosed with this letter is my resum(拼寫錯誤), which further details my previous training and strength and working experiences. Moreover, not only do my qualitifications(拼寫錯誤) and experiences make me(加不定冠詞a) perfect candidate for it, my interactive personal skill and teamwork spirt(拼寫錯誤) are well suited for working as an Internet administrator. Finally, I would be much grateful if you are so kind as to arrange an interview so that I could explain in more details in person the relevance of my educational background and working experiences(這一部分可以去掉，因為interview基本上會涉及這些內容). yours(Yours)truly, Li Ming 點評：6分

　　第二段的結構會讓你的內容不是很充實，不如簡要的介紹一下你的學歷和工作經驗，最后說附上簡歷。最后一段可以加一句Im looking forward to blabla之類的話。

　　I am a senior from department of Computer Science, (加連詞and或是把前邊的逗號改為句號)I am writing to you for applying(用to apply更順暢一些) for the position of an Internet administrator which your recently advertised.

　　I am a senior from department of Computer Science,I am writing to you for applying for the position of an Internet administrator which your recently advertised.

　　I am sure that I can qualitied for it.First,enclosed with this letter is my resum,which further details my previous training and strength and working experiences.Moreover,not only do my qualitifications and experiences make me perfect candidate for it,my interactive personal skill and teamwork spirt are well suited for working as an Internet administrator.

　　Finally,I would be much grateful if you are so kind as to arrange an interview so that I could explain in more details in person the relevance of my educational background and working experiences.

　　yours truly,

　　Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Sir or Madom(拼寫錯誤),

　　I am sure that I can qualitied(拼寫錯誤) for it. First, enclosed with this letter is my resum(拼寫錯誤), which further details my previous training and strength and working experiences. Moreover, not only do my qualitifications(拼寫錯誤) and experiences make me(加不定冠詞a) perfect candidate for it, my interactive personal skill and teamwork spirt(拼寫錯誤) are well suited for working as an Internet administrator. Finally, I would be much grateful if you are so kind as to arrange an interview so that I could explain in more details in person the relevance of my educational background and working experiences(這一部分可以去掉，因為interview基本上會涉及這些內容). yours(Yours)truly, Li Ming 點評：6分

　　第二段的結構會讓你的內容不是很充實，不如簡要的介紹一下你的學歷和工作經驗，最后說附上簡歷。最后一段可以加一句Im looking forward to blabla之類的話。

　　I am a senior from department of Computer Science, (加連詞and或是把前邊的逗號改為句號)I am writing to you for applying(用to apply更順暢一些) for the position of an Internet administrator which your recently advertised.