經典范文及點評：自我創業
大學生自我創業已經不是一個新鮮的話題了。那么自我創業有何利，又有何弊呢?看過本文之后你就知道了。或許這對面臨畢業的你還是個不小的幫助呢!
Self employment
Self employment could bring many advantages. One of the advantages of being self-employed is that the profit the business makes belongs to the owner. If the self-employed person succeeds in business, he has the chance to earn a great deal of money. The profit earned is the reward for the owners effort, ability and creativity. Thus, a second advantage is that a persons intelligence and abilities have a direct effect on the earnings. A third advantage of being self-employed is that a person can control his working hours. While not all self-employed people are completely free, most of them have more control over this area than the salaried people.
However, being self-employed is not without problems. First, being ones own boss places the responsibility directly on that individual shoulders. Everyone has some weaknesses in a certain aspects. These weaknesses will affect how successful a self-employed person is. Second, though the self-employed can earn considerable profits with a successful business, losses can force them out of business and sometimes, place them in debt. A third disadvantage concerns income security. Self-employed people have no guaranteed wage. Their earnings can vary greatly, depending on business conditions. Salaried people, however, can generally count on continued earnings. In addition, salaried people often enjoy fringe benefits that mean greater peace of mind. One of these benefits may be insurance paid for by the employer that continues the employees salary in the event of sickness or accident while many self-employed people do not have such protection①.
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行文點評
文章結構簡單明了。第一段闡述了自我創業的3個好處。第二段分析了自我創業所存在的問題。
兩段中first, second, third的使用，不僅使文章在句式上顯得條理分明，更在內容上體現了連貫性。
好文妙譯
自我創業
自我創業的好處之一是商業利潤歸創業者所有。如果創業者生意成功，他有可能掙很多錢。這些利潤是對創業者努力、能力和創造力的回報。因此，自我創業的第二個好處是一個人的才智和能力直接反映在收入上。自我創業的第三個優勢是自己做老板能夠支配自己的工作時間。雖然不是所有的創業者都有完全的自由，但是相對于工薪族來說，他們大多數人在這方面擁有更多的自主權。
但是，自我創業并不是一帆風順的事。首先，做自己的老板把責任直接放到了個人的肩上。每個人在某些方面都會有一些弱點，而這些弱點會對創業者的成功產生影響。其次，自己做老板時，雖然生意成功會帶來很大的盈利，但是一旦失敗就可能造成破產，有時甚至會負債累累。第三個弊端涉及收入的穩定性。創業者沒有穩定的工資。依據生意的狀況，他們的收入浮動很大。而工薪族通常可以依靠持續穩定的工資。此外，他們通常可以享受著額外福利，這意味著他們的心態可以更加的平和。其中一項福利就是由雇主為雇員支付保險，以保障他們在生病或遇到意外的情況下還能繼續領到工資。相比之下，很多創業者就沒有這種保障了。
詞匯斟酌
in debt 負債
count on 指望，依靠
fringe a.附加的，額外的;邊緣的
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】in the event of sth萬一;倘若
【臨摹】In the event of his death Shelia will inherit the money.一旦他故去，希拉就會繼承這筆錢。
思如泉涌
Something attempted, something done. 有嘗試就會有收獲。
Actions speak louder than words. 行動勝于語言。
大學生自我創業已經不是一個新鮮的話題了。那么自我創業有何利，又有何弊呢?看過本文之后你就知道了。或許這對面臨畢業的你還是個不小的幫助呢!
Self employment
Self employment could bring many advantages. One of the advantages of being self-employed is that the profit the business makes belongs to the owner. If the self-employed person succeeds in business, he has the chance to earn a great deal of money. The profit earned is the reward for the owners effort, ability and creativity. Thus, a second advantage is that a persons intelligence and abilities have a direct effect on the earnings. A third advantage of being self-employed is that a person can control his working hours. While not all self-employed people are completely free, most of them have more control over this area than the salaried people.
However, being self-employed is not without problems. First, being ones own boss places the responsibility directly on that individual shoulders. Everyone has some weaknesses in a certain aspects. These weaknesses will affect how successful a self-employed person is. Second, though the self-employed can earn considerable profits with a successful business, losses can force them out of business and sometimes, place them in debt. A third disadvantage concerns income security. Self-employed people have no guaranteed wage. Their earnings can vary greatly, depending on business conditions. Salaried people, however, can generally count on continued earnings. In addition, salaried people often enjoy fringe benefits that mean greater peace of mind. One of these benefits may be insurance paid for by the employer that continues the employees salary in the event of sickness or accident while many self-employed people do not have such protection①.
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行文點評
文章結構簡單明了。第一段闡述了自我創業的3個好處。第二段分析了自我創業所存在的問題。
兩段中first, second, third的使用，不僅使文章在句式上顯得條理分明，更在內容上體現了連貫性。
好文妙譯
自我創業
自我創業的好處之一是商業利潤歸創業者所有。如果創業者生意成功，他有可能掙很多錢。這些利潤是對創業者努力、能力和創造力的回報。因此，自我創業的第二個好處是一個人的才智和能力直接反映在收入上。自我創業的第三個優勢是自己做老板能夠支配自己的工作時間。雖然不是所有的創業者都有完全的自由，但是相對于工薪族來說，他們大多數人在這方面擁有更多的自主權。
但是，自我創業并不是一帆風順的事。首先，做自己的老板把責任直接放到了個人的肩上。每個人在某些方面都會有一些弱點，而這些弱點會對創業者的成功產生影響。其次，自己做老板時，雖然生意成功會帶來很大的盈利，但是一旦失敗就可能造成破產，有時甚至會負債累累。第三個弊端涉及收入的穩定性。創業者沒有穩定的工資。依據生意的狀況，他們的收入浮動很大。而工薪族通常可以依靠持續穩定的工資。此外，他們通常可以享受著額外福利，這意味著他們的心態可以更加的平和。其中一項福利就是由雇主為雇員支付保險，以保障他們在生病或遇到意外的情況下還能繼續領到工資。相比之下，很多創業者就沒有這種保障了。
詞匯斟酌
in debt 負債
count on 指望，依靠
fringe a.附加的，額外的;邊緣的
佳句臨摹
①【注釋】in the event of sth萬一;倘若
【臨摹】In the event of his death Shelia will inherit the money.一旦他故去，希拉就會繼承這筆錢。
思如泉涌
Something attempted, something done. 有嘗試就會有收獲。
Actions speak louder than words. 行動勝于語言。
