2024屆山東省膠州市高考英語二輪寫作賞析精編（5）
山東省膠州市2024高考英語（二輪）寫作賞析精編（5）及參考范文
2024書面表達訓練
假設你是李華，在互聯網上看到英國高中生Tom登的一則啟事：希望結識一位中國朋友，以便學習中國的語言和文化。請你以李華的名義用英文給Tom發一封電子郵件，主要內容包括： 1. 你怎樣得知Tom的愿望； 2. 你愿意成為他的朋友； 3. 你打算如何幫助他； 4. 你盼望他的回復。 注意：1. 詞數100左右；2. 可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫； 3. 電子郵件的格式已為你寫好，但不計入總詞數。 DearTom,
I’ve learned _____________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【參考范文】
Dear Tom,
I’ve learned it from the Internet that you want to make a Chinese friend so as to learn the Chinese language and culture. I’m glad that you show such great interest in China and I would like to be your friend.
I’ll try my best to write to you as often as possible to introduce you the Chinese culture. When you have an opportunity to come to China, I’ll teach you how to speak Chinese and show you around some famous historical places of interest. Anyway, I’m going to help you as much as I can. How do you think?
I’m looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【廣東省高三考前沖刺卷】
讀寫任務(共1小題，滿分25分)
閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
Halloween is very popular in western countries.On October 31st，dozens of children dressed in costumes(節日服裝) knock on their neighbors’ doors and yell “Trick or Treat” when the door opens.Pirates and princesses，ghosts and popular heroes of the day all hold bags open to catch the candy or other goodies that the neighbors drop in.As they give each child a treat the neighbors exclaim over the costumes and try to guess who is under the masks.
Today school dances and neighborhood parties called 揵lock parties?are popular among the young and the old.Moreig and more adults celebrate Halloween.They dress up like historical or political figures and go to masquerade parties(化裝舞會)．In larger cities，costumed children and their parents gather at shopping malls early in the evening.Stores and businesses give parties with games and treats for the children.Teenagers enjoy costume dances at their schools and the more outrageous the costume，the better!
Certain pranks(惡作劇) such as soaping car windows and tipping over garbage cans are expected.But partying and pranks are not the only things that Halloweeners enjoy doing.Some collect money to buy food and medicine for needy children around the world.
寫作內容
1．以約30詞概括短文的要點。
2．以約120詞就“中西節日的不同”為主題寫一篇短文，并包含以下內容要點：
(1)你還知道哪些西方節日？你印象中的西方節日有哪些特點？
(2)請具體講述一個你熟悉的中國傳統節日；
(3)你更喜歡中國傳統節日，還是西方節日？為什么？
寫作要求
你可以使用實例或其他論述方法支持你的論點，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不要抄襲閱讀材料中的句子。
評分標準
概括準確，語言規范，內容合適，語篇連貫。
________________________________________________________________________
讀寫任務【參考范文】
On October 31st，people in western countries dress themselves in costumes to celebrate Halloween.School dances and neighbourhood parties are popular on that day.Pranks are played for fun.
Many western festivals are very popular all over the world，such as Christmas，Thanksgiving Day，April Fool’s Day and so on.Personally，I think the western festivals are romantic and exciting.Colourful decorations are filled with all streets.People will gather together and hold parties.They have a good time singing and dancing during the parties.
Traditional Chinese festivals are popular too.The Mid璦utumnn Festival is my favourite.It falls on the fifteenth day of the eighth lunar month.On this day，the moon is said to be its biggest and brightest so people meet in the evening and watch the moon.This festival is important because it is a special occasion for family.The traditional food，mooncakes，are made with bean paste，but nowadays there are many different kinds of mooncakes，including fruit，coffee and even ice-cream mooncakes.
In my opinion，I prefer the traditional Chinese festivals to western festivals.China has a long history and its festivals are full of cultural meanings.Chinese people enjoy food，the traditional activities of the festivals as well as the love of their motherland.
【北京市豐臺區2024統一模擬】第二節 情景作文(20分)
假設你是紅星中學高二(1)班的學生李華，下面四幅圖描述了你們家上周收留流浪狗的真實故事，請根據圖片的先后順序，為校刊“英語園地”寫一篇短文。
注意：1. 文章的開頭已為你寫好。
2. 詞數不少于60。
Last Friday，
第二節 情景作文(20分)
一、評分原則：
1. 本題總分為20分，按5個檔次給分。
2. 評分時，先根據文章的內容和語言質量初步確定其檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量，確定或調整檔次，最后給分。
3. 評分時應考慮：內容要點的完整性、上下文的連貫、詞匯和句式的多樣性及語言的準確性。
4. 拼寫、標點符號或書寫影響內容表達時，應視其影響程度予以考慮。英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受。
5. 詞數少于60，從總分中減去1分。
二、內容要點：
1. 發現流浪狗并帶回家
2. 給小狗喂食、洗澡
3. 討論是否留下小狗
4. 遛狗、和小狗玩耍
三、各檔次的給分范圍和要求：
第一檔 完全完成了試題規定的任務。
·覆蓋了所有內容要點；
·運用了多樣的句式和豐富的詞匯；
·語法或用詞方面有個別錯誤，但為盡可能表達豐富的內容所致；體現了較強的語言運用能力；
·有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，所寫內容連貫、結構緊湊。
完全達到了預期的寫作目的。
18分—20分
第二檔 完全完成了試題規定的任務。
·覆蓋了所有內容要點：
·運用的句式和詞匯能滿足任務要求；
·語法和用詞基本準確，少許錯誤主要為盡可能表達豐富的內容所致；
·使用了簡單的語句間連接成分，所寫內容連貫。
達到了預期的寫作目的。
15分—17分
第三檔 基本完成了試題規定的任務。
·覆蓋了內容要點：
·運用的句式和詞匯基本滿足任務要求；
·語法和用詞方面有一些錯誤，但不影響理解。
基本達到了預期的寫作目的。
12分—14分
第四檔 未恰當完成試題規定的任務。
·漏掉或未描述清楚主要內容；
·所用句式和詞匯有限；
·語法或用詞方面的錯誤影響了對所寫內容的理解。
未能清楚地傳達信息。
6分—11分
第五檔 未完成試題規定的任務。
·明顯遺漏主要內容；
·句式單調、詞匯貧乏；
·語法或用詞方面錯誤較多，嚴重影響了對所寫內容的理解。
1分—5分
0分 未能傳達任何信息；所寫內容與要求無關。
四、Possible versions:
Possible version 1:
Last Friday, on the way home from school, I found a dirty puppy dog lying beside the dustbin. He was so weak that he couldn't open his eyes. I felt sorry for the puppy and carried him home immediately. After feeding him food and milk, I gave him a shower. I was so glad to see the dog recover. He was so lovely and I wanted to keep him. After discussing the situation with my parents, I decided to adopt him. Today the dog has become part of our family. We walk him in the park, play with him and take good care of him. He brings us happiness and keeps us company.
(111 words)
Possible version 2:
Last Friday, a chance encounter changed me and my family's life greatly.
After school, I was about to enter my apartment building when a little dirty dog, lying beside the dustbin, caught my eye. He looked extremely weak. Immediately the homeless dog filled me with sympathy. So I bent down and held him in my arms. I rushed him upstairs and right away fixed him some food. Then, I gave him a bath. After the bath he looked energetic and refreshed. What a lovely dog!
When my parents got home, I asked if I could keep the dog. To my surprise and happiness, they agreed. From that day, he has become a member of our family. Everyone has enjoyed his company. My parents walk him often. He and I play joyfully.
Looking at the cute, happy dog today. I realize that I did the fight thing. I brought him to a warm, loving home and he has brought us great happiness and laughter.
(161 words)
山東省膠州市2024高考英語（二輪）寫作賞析精編（5）及參考范文
2024書面表達訓練
假設你是李華，在互聯網上看到英國高中生Tom登的一則啟事：希望結識一位中國朋友，以便學習中國的語言和文化。請你以李華的名義用英文給Tom發一封電子郵件，主要內容包括： 1. 你怎樣得知Tom的愿望； 2. 你愿意成為他的朋友； 3. 你打算如何幫助他； 4. 你盼望他的回復。 注意：1. 詞數100左右；2. 可適當增加細節，以使行文連貫； 3. 電子郵件的格式已為你寫好，但不計入總詞數。 DearTom,
I’ve learned _____________________________________________________________________
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【參考范文】
Dear Tom,
I’ve learned it from the Internet that you want to make a Chinese friend so as to learn the Chinese language and culture. I’m glad that you show such great interest in China and I would like to be your friend.
I’ll try my best to write to you as often as possible to introduce you the Chinese culture. When you have an opportunity to come to China, I’ll teach you how to speak Chinese and show you around some famous historical places of interest. Anyway, I’m going to help you as much as I can. How do you think?
I’m looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【廣東省高三考前沖刺卷】
讀寫任務(共1小題，滿分25分)
閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
Halloween is very popular in western countries.On October 31st，dozens of children dressed in costumes(節日服裝) knock on their neighbors’ doors and yell “Trick or Treat” when the door opens.Pirates and princesses，ghosts and popular heroes of the day all hold bags open to catch the candy or other goodies that the neighbors drop in.As they give each child a treat the neighbors exclaim over the costumes and try to guess who is under the masks.
Today school dances and neighborhood parties called 揵lock parties?are popular among the young and the old.Moreig and more adults celebrate Halloween.They dress up like historical or political figures and go to masquerade parties(化裝舞會)．In larger cities，costumed children and their parents gather at shopping malls early in the evening.Stores and businesses give parties with games and treats for the children.Teenagers enjoy costume dances at their schools and the more outrageous the costume，the better!
Certain pranks(惡作劇) such as soaping car windows and tipping over garbage cans are expected.But partying and pranks are not the only things that Halloweeners enjoy doing.Some collect money to buy food and medicine for needy children around the world.
寫作內容
1．以約30詞概括短文的要點。
2．以約120詞就“中西節日的不同”為主題寫一篇短文，并包含以下內容要點：
(1)你還知道哪些西方節日？你印象中的西方節日有哪些特點？
(2)請具體講述一個你熟悉的中國傳統節日；
(3)你更喜歡中國傳統節日，還是西方節日？為什么？
寫作要求
你可以使用實例或其他論述方法支持你的論點，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不要抄襲閱讀材料中的句子。
評分標準
概括準確，語言規范，內容合適，語篇連貫。
________________________________________________________________________
讀寫任務【參考范文】
On October 31st，people in western countries dress themselves in costumes to celebrate Halloween.School dances and neighbourhood parties are popular on that day.Pranks are played for fun.
Many western festivals are very popular all over the world，such as Christmas，Thanksgiving Day，April Fool’s Day and so on.Personally，I think the western festivals are romantic and exciting.Colourful decorations are filled with all streets.People will gather together and hold parties.They have a good time singing and dancing during the parties.
Traditional Chinese festivals are popular too.The Mid璦utumnn Festival is my favourite.It falls on the fifteenth day of the eighth lunar month.On this day，the moon is said to be its biggest and brightest so people meet in the evening and watch the moon.This festival is important because it is a special occasion for family.The traditional food，mooncakes，are made with bean paste，but nowadays there are many different kinds of mooncakes，including fruit，coffee and even ice-cream mooncakes.
In my opinion，I prefer the traditional Chinese festivals to western festivals.China has a long history and its festivals are full of cultural meanings.Chinese people enjoy food，the traditional activities of the festivals as well as the love of their motherland.
【北京市豐臺區2024統一模擬】第二節 情景作文(20分)
假設你是紅星中學高二(1)班的學生李華，下面四幅圖描述了你們家上周收留流浪狗的真實故事，請根據圖片的先后順序，為校刊“英語園地”寫一篇短文。
注意：1. 文章的開頭已為你寫好。
2. 詞數不少于60。
Last Friday，
第二節 情景作文(20分)
一、評分原則：
1. 本題總分為20分，按5個檔次給分。
2. 評分時，先根據文章的內容和語言質量初步確定其檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量，確定或調整檔次，最后給分。
3. 評分時應考慮：內容要點的完整性、上下文的連貫、詞匯和句式的多樣性及語言的準確性。
4. 拼寫、標點符號或書寫影響內容表達時，應視其影響程度予以考慮。英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受。
5. 詞數少于60，從總分中減去1分。
二、內容要點：
1. 發現流浪狗并帶回家
2. 給小狗喂食、洗澡
3. 討論是否留下小狗
4. 遛狗、和小狗玩耍
三、各檔次的給分范圍和要求：
第一檔 完全完成了試題規定的任務。
·覆蓋了所有內容要點；
·運用了多樣的句式和豐富的詞匯；
·語法或用詞方面有個別錯誤，但為盡可能表達豐富的內容所致；體現了較強的語言運用能力；
·有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，所寫內容連貫、結構緊湊。
完全達到了預期的寫作目的。
18分—20分
第二檔 完全完成了試題規定的任務。
·覆蓋了所有內容要點：
·運用的句式和詞匯能滿足任務要求；
·語法和用詞基本準確，少許錯誤主要為盡可能表達豐富的內容所致；
·使用了簡單的語句間連接成分，所寫內容連貫。
達到了預期的寫作目的。
15分—17分
第三檔 基本完成了試題規定的任務。
·覆蓋了內容要點：
·運用的句式和詞匯基本滿足任務要求；
·語法和用詞方面有一些錯誤，但不影響理解。
基本達到了預期的寫作目的。
12分—14分
第四檔 未恰當完成試題規定的任務。
·漏掉或未描述清楚主要內容；
·所用句式和詞匯有限；
·語法或用詞方面的錯誤影響了對所寫內容的理解。
未能清楚地傳達信息。
6分—11分
第五檔 未完成試題規定的任務。
·明顯遺漏主要內容；
·句式單調、詞匯貧乏；
·語法或用詞方面錯誤較多，嚴重影響了對所寫內容的理解。
1分—5分
0分 未能傳達任何信息；所寫內容與要求無關。
四、Possible versions:
Possible version 1:
Last Friday, on the way home from school, I found a dirty puppy dog lying beside the dustbin. He was so weak that he couldn't open his eyes. I felt sorry for the puppy and carried him home immediately. After feeding him food and milk, I gave him a shower. I was so glad to see the dog recover. He was so lovely and I wanted to keep him. After discussing the situation with my parents, I decided to adopt him. Today the dog has become part of our family. We walk him in the park, play with him and take good care of him. He brings us happiness and keeps us company.
(111 words)
Possible version 2:
Last Friday, a chance encounter changed me and my family's life greatly.
After school, I was about to enter my apartment building when a little dirty dog, lying beside the dustbin, caught my eye. He looked extremely weak. Immediately the homeless dog filled me with sympathy. So I bent down and held him in my arms. I rushed him upstairs and right away fixed him some food. Then, I gave him a bath. After the bath he looked energetic and refreshed. What a lovely dog!
When my parents got home, I asked if I could keep the dog. To my surprise and happiness, they agreed. From that day, he has become a member of our family. Everyone has enjoyed his company. My parents walk him often. He and I play joyfully.
Looking at the cute, happy dog today. I realize that I did the fight thing. I brought him to a warm, loving home and he has brought us great happiness and laughter.
(161 words)
