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Part A Directions: Restrictions on the use of plastic bags have not been so successful in some regions. White pollution is still going on. Write a letter to the editor of your local newspaper to give your opinions briefly and make two or three suggestions you should write about 100 words. Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use Li Ming instead. You do not need to write the address. Part B Directions: In your essay, you should describing the drawing briefly, explain its intended meaning, and then give your comments. You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. Part A 【題目類型】 2009年小作文再次考查了事務(wù)信函中的建議信,近似于2007年考過的建議信,在考查了幾年信函后,信函的類型開始重復(fù),這是一件好事,說明信函主要類型已經(jīng)在試題中出現(xiàn)過一輪,考生今后的復(fù)習(xí)更容易把握住規(guī)律,無論今后考道歉信還是感謝信,咨詢信還是投訴信,真題的示范指導(dǎo)性會(huì)很強(qiáng)。與2007年小作文不同之處在于兩點(diǎn),首先是建議信的內(nèi)容:2007年是建議大學(xué)圖書館改進(jìn)服務(wù),2009年主題為建議如何進(jìn)一步控制白色污染;其次是2009年的提綱更加豐富,還需要寫出現(xiàn)狀和觀點(diǎn)看法,這就需要在本年度的試卷上有更多的議論。 【審題構(gòu)思】 本題的命題緊扣時(shí)事,2008年中國政府發(fā)布了限塑令,對(duì)塑料袋的使用給予了限制,成為年度中國環(huán)保方面最大的一個(gè)事件。在12月四級(jí)考試的寫作中剛剛考過,沒想到又出現(xiàn)在考研的題目中。題目指示中給出的信息明顯多于往年,尤其是開始的現(xiàn)狀描述,描述了關(guān)于塑料袋禁止并不太成功的情況。由于限制好了文章的主要思路,自由發(fā)揮的空間僅限于觀點(diǎn)和建議部分。 文章的整個(gè)格局類似于一篇提綱式議論文,用現(xiàn)狀描述/觀點(diǎn)表述/三點(diǎn)建議的模式展開即可。 第一段需要描述現(xiàn)狀,把提示中的兩句話展開成英文表達(dá),同時(shí)需要提到中國實(shí)行的限塑令,特別要寫出白色污染這個(gè)表達(dá)。第二段展開觀點(diǎn),無非是深入強(qiáng)調(diào)塑料袋污染環(huán)境的嚴(yán)重性。第三段提建議,可以把政府法制建設(shè)、環(huán)保意識(shí)教育以及報(bào)紙媒介發(fā)揮宣傳作用寫進(jìn)去,由于是給報(bào)社編輯寫信,自然引申出三條建議。 【推薦范文】 Dear Editor, Im writing for the purpose of expressing my views on further prohibiting the use of plastic bags. China has officially enacted the law of plastic bag restriction, but it is observed in vain in several places, thus resulting in the continuing of white pollution. Having the largest population in the world, China is exposed to the most serious plastic pollution. With the quickening pace of life, various disposable products are closely related to our regular life, including unrecyclable lunch boxes and plastic shopping bags. As it is difficult for them to decompose, people find themselves surrounded by an expanding ocean of white rubbish. As a result, it is advisable to solve the problems by three means. Above all, importance should be attached to reinforcing the implementation of the law. In addition, people in those places should gradually enhance their environmental awareness. There is no denying that your newspaper should play an important role in preaching the necessity of limiting the plastic bags. Thank you for your patience and concern in reading this letter. Yours sincerely, Li Ming (173 words) 【參考譯文】 尊敬的編輯: 我寫此信的目的是為了表達(dá)一下關(guān)于進(jìn)一步禁止塑料袋使用的想法。中國已經(jīng)正式頒布了限塑令,但是在某些地區(qū)該法令沒有被嚴(yán)格遵守,導(dǎo)致白色污染仍然在延續(xù)。 中國擁有世界上最多的人口,目前正面臨最嚴(yán)重的塑料袋污染。隨著人們生活節(jié)奏的加快,越來越多的一次性產(chǎn)品貼近了我們的日常生活,包括無法再循環(huán)的午餐餐盒和塑料購物袋。由于這些物品很難自然降解,人們發(fā)現(xiàn)自己已經(jīng)被日益擴(kuò)大的白色垃圾海洋所包圍。因此,需要通過三種方法來解決這些問題。首先,對(duì)于加強(qiáng)法規(guī)執(zhí)行要高度重視;其次,這些地區(qū)的人需要逐步提高環(huán)保意識(shí);不可否認(rèn)你們的報(bào)紙?jiān)谛麄飨匏芰畹谋匾园l(fā)面應(yīng)當(dāng)發(fā)揮重要的作用。 感謝您耐心并切認(rèn)真地閱讀了此信。 此致 敬禮 李明 【妙筆生花】 由于信件是寫給報(bào)社編輯,同時(shí)話題又比較嚴(yán)肅,因此文章屬于比較嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)?shù)氖聞?wù)信函,需要大量書面語用詞。在表達(dá)主題方面,以下用詞具有明顯的書面語特征。第一段中的頒布enact和 遵守observe。第二段中的面臨exposed to、 一次性產(chǎn)品disposable products、unrecyclable不可循環(huán)利用的、降解 decompose。第三段中的重視importance should be attached to、加強(qiáng)reinforce、實(shí)施implementation、提高覺悟enhance the awareness、宣傳preach。 文章在語言使用方面追求了語言正式詞多變的風(fēng)格,盡量使用不同的詞匯展現(xiàn)語言實(shí)力。如表示因果關(guān)系,首段使用了result in詞組,中間段使用了As it is,尾段則變成了As a result。表現(xiàn)污染則分別使用了如下表達(dá)white pollution、plastic pollution、various disposable products、unrecyclable lunch boxes and plastic shopping bags、.it is difficult for them to decompose、an expanding ocean of white rubbish.。提及限塑令時(shí),文章也先后出現(xiàn)了不同的表達(dá),如prohibiting the use of plastic bags、the law of plastic bag restriction、limiting the plastic bags。句式方面,以下幾個(gè)句式比較突出:首段的Im writing for the purpose of;中段的With the quickening pace of life,尾段的It is advisable to和There is no denying that;篇章結(jié)束的委婉禮貌用語則為Thank you for your patience and concern in reading this letter。 Part B 【題目類型】 如果從2000年算起,到今年正好連續(xù)第十年考查作文。由于作文能夠大幅度拉開考生的作文創(chuàng)作檔次,每一年考題都會(huì)進(jìn)行巧妙的設(shè)計(jì),在考場上給考生一種次曾相識(shí)又無從說起的復(fù)雜感覺。2009的作文繼續(xù)沿用了前兩年的出題風(fēng)格,不給題目,只有一幅,讓考生有充足的想象空間。但考官心目中的立意是單一而明確的,只要想象力延伸太遠(yuǎn),就會(huì)跑題。 【審題構(gòu)思】 連續(xù)考查了多次道德品質(zhì)話題后,考研命題一般會(huì)轉(zhuǎn)向問題解決題,即揭示社會(huì)問題或自然環(huán)境問題,要求考生深入分析并給出建議。在2008年的社會(huì)熱點(diǎn)中,團(tuán)結(jié)、抗災(zāi)與愛心、奧運(yùn)與愛國、食品安全、網(wǎng)絡(luò)科技、大學(xué)生就業(yè)成為大家密切關(guān)注的對(duì)象,其中網(wǎng)絡(luò)的話題層出不窮,包括網(wǎng)癮、網(wǎng)戀、網(wǎng)絡(luò)社區(qū)、博客、網(wǎng)上購物。由于中國已經(jīng)有數(shù)億網(wǎng)民,網(wǎng)絡(luò)的普及已經(jīng)滲透到了生活中的方方面面。網(wǎng)絡(luò)已經(jīng)在很大程度上取代了電視、廣播、報(bào)紙、電話等很多媒體的作用,給人們的生活帶來了便利,也帶來了大量鮮活的話題。 2009年的考題在設(shè)計(jì)上下了很大功夫。試卷上呈現(xiàn)出一個(gè)大型的蜘蛛網(wǎng),在網(wǎng)格中很多人在上網(wǎng)。很顯然網(wǎng)絡(luò)星羅棋布,把距離遙遠(yuǎn)的人們連結(jié)在一起,但蜘蛛網(wǎng)又把所有人分割在小隔斷中,讓他們近在咫尺卻依然無法面對(duì)面的溝通。中人們都在愉快地上網(wǎng),網(wǎng)絡(luò)普及到了生活的每一個(gè)角落。如果從事物的正反角度來看,帶來便利的同時(shí)又造成了溝通的不順暢,這正是作者所表達(dá)的中心思想。當(dāng)然最后是要讓考生對(duì)這個(gè)現(xiàn)象給予點(diǎn)評(píng)了。主流的思想一定是告誡網(wǎng)民們?cè)谏暇W(wǎng)的過程中不要過度沉溺,形成網(wǎng)癮,不要耽誤時(shí)間或喪失溝通的技能。上網(wǎng)只是生活當(dāng)中的一部分而已 在創(chuàng)作文章時(shí),可以遵循提綱來進(jìn)行三段式展開。第一段描述,對(duì)中的蜘蛛網(wǎng)和上網(wǎng)的人群進(jìn)行客觀描述。由于的風(fēng)格非常奇怪,有沖突的信息在里面,可以稍加點(diǎn)評(píng),指出其中人們通過網(wǎng)絡(luò)去溝通卻又被蜘蛛網(wǎng)隔開的現(xiàn)象。第二段是關(guān)鍵展開段,先要從蜘蛛網(wǎng)的象征意義入手,通過抽象面的象征意義引入主題:網(wǎng)絡(luò)功能的二元性,或利弊。接著考生可以充分論述網(wǎng)絡(luò)給人類生活帶來的好處,包括獲得資訊信息、聊天溝通、在線學(xué)習(xí)、發(fā)送資料、網(wǎng)絡(luò)購物等等。同時(shí),又要把網(wǎng)絡(luò)已經(jīng)帶來的問題展示出來,和本相關(guān)的,就是影響了人們面對(duì)面的溝通。網(wǎng)民隱藏在網(wǎng)絡(luò)的一端,戴上虛幻的面具,和另一個(gè)帶上面具的人聊天。這樣的溝通是以幻想和推測(cè)進(jìn)行的,雖然激發(fā)了每個(gè)人的好奇心,但卻浪費(fèi)了時(shí)間,遠(yuǎn)離了現(xiàn)實(shí)生活,讓不少人變得自閉,失去了溝通的技能。在第二段分析的基礎(chǔ)上,最后一段得出主流結(jié)論,即勸導(dǎo)人們要適度上網(wǎng),不要過度,利用好時(shí)間生活和工作,不要把時(shí)間全部浪費(fèi)在上網(wǎng)中,不要沾染網(wǎng)癮。網(wǎng)絡(luò)是用來豐富我們的生活的,絕不是為了給你我設(shè)置溝通的障礙。 【推薦范文】 The past decade has witnessed an increasingly inseparable relationship between man and Internet. As is vividly depicted in the picture, within a stretching spider web many people are surfing on line, either to entertain themselves or to meet the works needs. Actually on-line visiting has become a routine activity in our everyday life. However, it seems rather ironic to present people separated from each other by the spider web when they attempt to communicate. The metaphoric and impressive portrayal has subtly revealed the duality of the relationship between man and Internet. The spider web undoubtedly serves as a symbol of Internet, both connecting people and isolating them from each other. On the one hand, there is no denying that Internet is currently one of the most efficient media used for interpersonal communication. As a college student, I get on line everyday to discuss news with other people on BBS, to study English by registering for web courses, to chat freely through e-mails with my friends. Being a veteran on-line shopper, I frequently bargain with sellers to purchase books at much lower prices. But on the other hand, a good many people admit that they are too much addicted to Internet to maintain face-to-face contact with their friends and colleagues. Cyber-living resembles the experience of seeing disguised people behind a mask, maintaining distance between one another. Once indulged in the fictitious world, people feel reluctant to approach others and to concentrate on real life. Thats why some people have lost the skill of direct contact and get alienated from others. Therefore, it is necessary for us to use Internet in a reasonable way and restrain from addiction. After all, Internet is invented to connect you and me, and to bring conveniences to our life rather than set a barrier to keep people beyond reach. 【參考譯文】 在過去的十年中,人類已經(jīng)與網(wǎng)絡(luò)形成了不可分割的關(guān)系。正如此生動(dòng)描繪出,在一個(gè)向四面伸展開的蜘蛛網(wǎng)中,很多人使用電腦上網(wǎng),有的獲得娛樂,有的在滿足工作的需要。實(shí)際上網(wǎng)上瀏覽已經(jīng)成為我們?nèi)粘I钪械囊粋€(gè)常見現(xiàn)象。但中呈現(xiàn)出了一個(gè)十分矛盾的現(xiàn)象,人們?cè)谠噲D溝通的同時(shí)卻被蜘蛛網(wǎng)分隔開來。 這幅充滿暗喻、表現(xiàn)力深刻,微妙地揭示出了人與網(wǎng)絡(luò)的二元關(guān)系。毫無疑問,蜘蛛網(wǎng)象征著互聯(lián)網(wǎng),把人們連接在一起又讓他們相互隔離。一方面,互聯(lián)網(wǎng)作為一種媒介在人與人溝通方面的高效率已經(jīng)無可爭議。作為一個(gè)大學(xué)生,我每天上網(wǎng)在論壇中和其他網(wǎng)友討論資訊,通過注冊(cè)網(wǎng)絡(luò)課程來學(xué)英語,和我的朋友們通過電子郵件自由交流,作為一個(gè)網(wǎng)購高手,我經(jīng)常與賣家砍價(jià)并且以很低的價(jià)格買到圖書。但另一方面,不少人承認(rèn)他們已經(jīng)上網(wǎng)上癮,以致不習(xí)慣和朋友和同事進(jìn)行當(dāng)面交流。網(wǎng)絡(luò)生存近似于戴著面具和其他偽裝的人見面,互相保持著距離。一旦沉溺于虛幻世界,人們變得很不情愿走近對(duì)方或者專注于現(xiàn)實(shí)生活。因此有些人已經(jīng)喪失了直接交流的技能,變得互相疏離。 因此,我們需要合理使用互聯(lián)網(wǎng)并且克制自己不要上癮。畢竟互聯(lián)網(wǎng)發(fā)明出來是為了連接你我、給生活帶來便利的,而不是設(shè)立障礙讓互相之間變得遙不可及。 【妙筆生花】 本文從語言構(gòu)造上充分使用了各類技巧,使得文章詞句豐富多彩,閃光點(diǎn)層出不窮。綜合看來,有以下幾個(gè)方面值得關(guān)注: 1、精準(zhǔn)的用詞 描述蜘蛛網(wǎng)伸展-stretching;利弊二元-duality;資深的-veteran;上癮的-addicted;偽裝的-disguised;沉溺于-indulged in; 克制-restrain from;帶來便利-bring conveniences to 2、多變的表達(dá) 表示上網(wǎng):surf on line;on-line visiting;get on line;cyber-living;use Internet 溝通連接:communicate;connect; interpersonal communication;maintain face-to-face contact; approach others;direct contact 分開隔離:separate from;isolate from;maintain distance between one another;get alienated from;set a barrier;keep people beyond reach 強(qiáng)調(diào)肯定:undoubtedly;there is no denying that;after all 3、構(gòu)架式語句 第一段使用了As is vividly depicted in the picture進(jìn)行描述。第二段開始的The metaphoric and impressive portrayal has subtly revealed是大量作文可以使用的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)議論文表達(dá),適用于陳述象征寓意。第二段中分正反兩個(gè)方面論述時(shí),采用了On the one hand和 However, on the other hand這樣的結(jié)構(gòu)。第二段后面的反面論證采用了Once indulged inpeople feel reluctant to連續(xù)表達(dá)出沉溺于網(wǎng)絡(luò)的不良后果。第三段開始則直接用Therefore, it is necessary to得出文章的建議和結(jié)論。 4、句型變化 文章開始的倒裝式表達(dá)令人印象深刻,The past decade has witnessed an increasingly inseparable relationship between man and Internet. 中段的分詞表達(dá)如Being a veteran on-line shopper,和Once indulged in the fictitious world同樣呈現(xiàn)了語言的變化。 5、不定時(shí)并列結(jié)構(gòu) 例一:As a college student, I get on line everyday to discuss news with other people on BBS, to study English by registering for web courses, to chat freely through e-mails with my friends. 例二:After all, Internet is invented to connect you and me, and to bring conveniences to our life rather than set a barrier to keep people beyond reach.
Part A Directions: Restrictions on the use of plastic bags have not been so successful in some regions. White pollution is still going on. Write a letter to the editor of your local newspaper to give your opinions briefly and make two or three suggestions you should write about 100 words. Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use Li Ming instead. You do not need to write the address. Part B Directions: In your essay, you should describing the drawing briefly, explain its intended meaning, and then give your comments. You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. Part A 【題目類型】 2009年小作文再次考查了事務(wù)信函中的建議信,近似于2007年考過的建議信,在考查了幾年信函后,信函的類型開始重復(fù),這是一件好事,說明信函主要類型已經(jīng)在試題中出現(xiàn)過一輪,考生今后的復(fù)習(xí)更容易把握住規(guī)律,無論今后考道歉信還是感謝信,咨詢信還是投訴信,真題的示范指導(dǎo)性會(huì)很強(qiáng)。與2007年小作文不同之處在于兩點(diǎn),首先是建議信的內(nèi)容:2007年是建議大學(xué)圖書館改進(jìn)服務(wù),2009年主題為建議如何進(jìn)一步控制白色污染;其次是2009年的提綱更加豐富,還需要寫出現(xiàn)狀和觀點(diǎn)看法,這就需要在本年度的試卷上有更多的議論。 【審題構(gòu)思】 本題的命題緊扣時(shí)事,2008年中國政府發(fā)布了限塑令,對(duì)塑料袋的使用給予了限制,成為年度中國環(huán)保方面最大的一個(gè)事件。在12月四級(jí)考試的寫作中剛剛考過,沒想到又出現(xiàn)在考研的題目中。題目指示中給出的信息明顯多于往年,尤其是開始的現(xiàn)狀描述,描述了關(guān)于塑料袋禁止并不太成功的情況。由于限制好了文章的主要思路,自由發(fā)揮的空間僅限于觀點(diǎn)和建議部分。 文章的整個(gè)格局類似于一篇提綱式議論文,用現(xiàn)狀描述/觀點(diǎn)表述/三點(diǎn)建議的模式展開即可。 第一段需要描述現(xiàn)狀,把提示中的兩句話展開成英文表達(dá),同時(shí)需要提到中國實(shí)行的限塑令,特別要寫出白色污染這個(gè)表達(dá)。第二段展開觀點(diǎn),無非是深入強(qiáng)調(diào)塑料袋污染環(huán)境的嚴(yán)重性。第三段提建議,可以把政府法制建設(shè)、環(huán)保意識(shí)教育以及報(bào)紙媒介發(fā)揮宣傳作用寫進(jìn)去,由于是給報(bào)社編輯寫信,自然引申出三條建議。 【推薦范文】 Dear Editor, Im writing for the purpose of expressing my views on further prohibiting the use of plastic bags. China has officially enacted the law of plastic bag restriction, but it is observed in vain in several places, thus resulting in the continuing of white pollution. Having the largest population in the world, China is exposed to the most serious plastic pollution. With the quickening pace of life, various disposable products are closely related to our regular life, including unrecyclable lunch boxes and plastic shopping bags. As it is difficult for them to decompose, people find themselves surrounded by an expanding ocean of white rubbish. As a result, it is advisable to solve the problems by three means. Above all, importance should be attached to reinforcing the implementation of the law. In addition, people in those places should gradually enhance their environmental awareness. There is no denying that your newspaper should play an important role in preaching the necessity of limiting the plastic bags. Thank you for your patience and concern in reading this letter. Yours sincerely, Li Ming (173 words) 【參考譯文】 尊敬的編輯: 我寫此信的目的是為了表達(dá)一下關(guān)于進(jìn)一步禁止塑料袋使用的想法。中國已經(jīng)正式頒布了限塑令,但是在某些地區(qū)該法令沒有被嚴(yán)格遵守,導(dǎo)致白色污染仍然在延續(xù)。 中國擁有世界上最多的人口,目前正面臨最嚴(yán)重的塑料袋污染。隨著人們生活節(jié)奏的加快,越來越多的一次性產(chǎn)品貼近了我們的日常生活,包括無法再循環(huán)的午餐餐盒和塑料購物袋。由于這些物品很難自然降解,人們發(fā)現(xiàn)自己已經(jīng)被日益擴(kuò)大的白色垃圾海洋所包圍。因此,需要通過三種方法來解決這些問題。首先,對(duì)于加強(qiáng)法規(guī)執(zhí)行要高度重視;其次,這些地區(qū)的人需要逐步提高環(huán)保意識(shí);不可否認(rèn)你們的報(bào)紙?jiān)谛麄飨匏芰畹谋匾园l(fā)面應(yīng)當(dāng)發(fā)揮重要的作用。 感謝您耐心并切認(rèn)真地閱讀了此信。 此致 敬禮 李明 【妙筆生花】 由于信件是寫給報(bào)社編輯,同時(shí)話題又比較嚴(yán)肅,因此文章屬于比較嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)?shù)氖聞?wù)信函,需要大量書面語用詞。在表達(dá)主題方面,以下用詞具有明顯的書面語特征。第一段中的頒布enact和 遵守observe。第二段中的面臨exposed to、 一次性產(chǎn)品disposable products、unrecyclable不可循環(huán)利用的、降解 decompose。第三段中的重視importance should be attached to、加強(qiáng)reinforce、實(shí)施implementation、提高覺悟enhance the awareness、宣傳preach。 文章在語言使用方面追求了語言正式詞多變的風(fēng)格,盡量使用不同的詞匯展現(xiàn)語言實(shí)力。如表示因果關(guān)系,首段使用了result in詞組,中間段使用了As it is,尾段則變成了As a result。表現(xiàn)污染則分別使用了如下表達(dá)white pollution、plastic pollution、various disposable products、unrecyclable lunch boxes and plastic shopping bags、.it is difficult for them to decompose、an expanding ocean of white rubbish.。提及限塑令時(shí),文章也先后出現(xiàn)了不同的表達(dá),如prohibiting the use of plastic bags、the law of plastic bag restriction、limiting the plastic bags。句式方面,以下幾個(gè)句式比較突出:首段的Im writing for the purpose of;中段的With the quickening pace of life,尾段的It is advisable to和There is no denying that;篇章結(jié)束的委婉禮貌用語則為Thank you for your patience and concern in reading this letter。 Part B 【題目類型】 如果從2000年算起,到今年正好連續(xù)第十年考查作文。由于作文能夠大幅度拉開考生的作文創(chuàng)作檔次,每一年考題都會(huì)進(jìn)行巧妙的設(shè)計(jì),在考場上給考生一種次曾相識(shí)又無從說起的復(fù)雜感覺。2009的作文繼續(xù)沿用了前兩年的出題風(fēng)格,不給題目,只有一幅,讓考生有充足的想象空間。但考官心目中的立意是單一而明確的,只要想象力延伸太遠(yuǎn),就會(huì)跑題。 【審題構(gòu)思】 連續(xù)考查了多次道德品質(zhì)話題后,考研命題一般會(huì)轉(zhuǎn)向問題解決題,即揭示社會(huì)問題或自然環(huán)境問題,要求考生深入分析并給出建議。在2008年的社會(huì)熱點(diǎn)中,團(tuán)結(jié)、抗災(zāi)與愛心、奧運(yùn)與愛國、食品安全、網(wǎng)絡(luò)科技、大學(xué)生就業(yè)成為大家密切關(guān)注的對(duì)象,其中網(wǎng)絡(luò)的話題層出不窮,包括網(wǎng)癮、網(wǎng)戀、網(wǎng)絡(luò)社區(qū)、博客、網(wǎng)上購物。由于中國已經(jīng)有數(shù)億網(wǎng)民,網(wǎng)絡(luò)的普及已經(jīng)滲透到了生活中的方方面面。網(wǎng)絡(luò)已經(jīng)在很大程度上取代了電視、廣播、報(bào)紙、電話等很多媒體的作用,給人們的生活帶來了便利,也帶來了大量鮮活的話題。 2009年的考題在設(shè)計(jì)上下了很大功夫。試卷上呈現(xiàn)出一個(gè)大型的蜘蛛網(wǎng),在網(wǎng)格中很多人在上網(wǎng)。很顯然網(wǎng)絡(luò)星羅棋布,把距離遙遠(yuǎn)的人們連結(jié)在一起,但蜘蛛網(wǎng)又把所有人分割在小隔斷中,讓他們近在咫尺卻依然無法面對(duì)面的溝通。中人們都在愉快地上網(wǎng),網(wǎng)絡(luò)普及到了生活的每一個(gè)角落。如果從事物的正反角度來看,帶來便利的同時(shí)又造成了溝通的不順暢,這正是作者所表達(dá)的中心思想。當(dāng)然最后是要讓考生對(duì)這個(gè)現(xiàn)象給予點(diǎn)評(píng)了。主流的思想一定是告誡網(wǎng)民們?cè)谏暇W(wǎng)的過程中不要過度沉溺,形成網(wǎng)癮,不要耽誤時(shí)間或喪失溝通的技能。上網(wǎng)只是生活當(dāng)中的一部分而已 在創(chuàng)作文章時(shí),可以遵循提綱來進(jìn)行三段式展開。第一段描述,對(duì)中的蜘蛛網(wǎng)和上網(wǎng)的人群進(jìn)行客觀描述。由于的風(fēng)格非常奇怪,有沖突的信息在里面,可以稍加點(diǎn)評(píng),指出其中人們通過網(wǎng)絡(luò)去溝通卻又被蜘蛛網(wǎng)隔開的現(xiàn)象。第二段是關(guān)鍵展開段,先要從蜘蛛網(wǎng)的象征意義入手,通過抽象面的象征意義引入主題:網(wǎng)絡(luò)功能的二元性,或利弊。接著考生可以充分論述網(wǎng)絡(luò)給人類生活帶來的好處,包括獲得資訊信息、聊天溝通、在線學(xué)習(xí)、發(fā)送資料、網(wǎng)絡(luò)購物等等。同時(shí),又要把網(wǎng)絡(luò)已經(jīng)帶來的問題展示出來,和本相關(guān)的,就是影響了人們面對(duì)面的溝通。網(wǎng)民隱藏在網(wǎng)絡(luò)的一端,戴上虛幻的面具,和另一個(gè)帶上面具的人聊天。這樣的溝通是以幻想和推測(cè)進(jìn)行的,雖然激發(fā)了每個(gè)人的好奇心,但卻浪費(fèi)了時(shí)間,遠(yuǎn)離了現(xiàn)實(shí)生活,讓不少人變得自閉,失去了溝通的技能。在第二段分析的基礎(chǔ)上,最后一段得出主流結(jié)論,即勸導(dǎo)人們要適度上網(wǎng),不要過度,利用好時(shí)間生活和工作,不要把時(shí)間全部浪費(fèi)在上網(wǎng)中,不要沾染網(wǎng)癮。網(wǎng)絡(luò)是用來豐富我們的生活的,絕不是為了給你我設(shè)置溝通的障礙。 【推薦范文】 The past decade has witnessed an increasingly inseparable relationship between man and Internet. As is vividly depicted in the picture, within a stretching spider web many people are surfing on line, either to entertain themselves or to meet the works needs. Actually on-line visiting has become a routine activity in our everyday life. However, it seems rather ironic to present people separated from each other by the spider web when they attempt to communicate. The metaphoric and impressive portrayal has subtly revealed the duality of the relationship between man and Internet. The spider web undoubtedly serves as a symbol of Internet, both connecting people and isolating them from each other. On the one hand, there is no denying that Internet is currently one of the most efficient media used for interpersonal communication. As a college student, I get on line everyday to discuss news with other people on BBS, to study English by registering for web courses, to chat freely through e-mails with my friends. Being a veteran on-line shopper, I frequently bargain with sellers to purchase books at much lower prices. But on the other hand, a good many people admit that they are too much addicted to Internet to maintain face-to-face contact with their friends and colleagues. Cyber-living resembles the experience of seeing disguised people behind a mask, maintaining distance between one another. Once indulged in the fictitious world, people feel reluctant to approach others and to concentrate on real life. Thats why some people have lost the skill of direct contact and get alienated from others. Therefore, it is necessary for us to use Internet in a reasonable way and restrain from addiction. After all, Internet is invented to connect you and me, and to bring conveniences to our life rather than set a barrier to keep people beyond reach. 【參考譯文】 在過去的十年中,人類已經(jīng)與網(wǎng)絡(luò)形成了不可分割的關(guān)系。正如此生動(dòng)描繪出,在一個(gè)向四面伸展開的蜘蛛網(wǎng)中,很多人使用電腦上網(wǎng),有的獲得娛樂,有的在滿足工作的需要。實(shí)際上網(wǎng)上瀏覽已經(jīng)成為我們?nèi)粘I钪械囊粋€(gè)常見現(xiàn)象。但中呈現(xiàn)出了一個(gè)十分矛盾的現(xiàn)象,人們?cè)谠噲D溝通的同時(shí)卻被蜘蛛網(wǎng)分隔開來。 這幅充滿暗喻、表現(xiàn)力深刻,微妙地揭示出了人與網(wǎng)絡(luò)的二元關(guān)系。毫無疑問,蜘蛛網(wǎng)象征著互聯(lián)網(wǎng),把人們連接在一起又讓他們相互隔離。一方面,互聯(lián)網(wǎng)作為一種媒介在人與人溝通方面的高效率已經(jīng)無可爭議。作為一個(gè)大學(xué)生,我每天上網(wǎng)在論壇中和其他網(wǎng)友討論資訊,通過注冊(cè)網(wǎng)絡(luò)課程來學(xué)英語,和我的朋友們通過電子郵件自由交流,作為一個(gè)網(wǎng)購高手,我經(jīng)常與賣家砍價(jià)并且以很低的價(jià)格買到圖書。但另一方面,不少人承認(rèn)他們已經(jīng)上網(wǎng)上癮,以致不習(xí)慣和朋友和同事進(jìn)行當(dāng)面交流。網(wǎng)絡(luò)生存近似于戴著面具和其他偽裝的人見面,互相保持著距離。一旦沉溺于虛幻世界,人們變得很不情愿走近對(duì)方或者專注于現(xiàn)實(shí)生活。因此有些人已經(jīng)喪失了直接交流的技能,變得互相疏離。 因此,我們需要合理使用互聯(lián)網(wǎng)并且克制自己不要上癮。畢竟互聯(lián)網(wǎng)發(fā)明出來是為了連接你我、給生活帶來便利的,而不是設(shè)立障礙讓互相之間變得遙不可及。 【妙筆生花】 本文從語言構(gòu)造上充分使用了各類技巧,使得文章詞句豐富多彩,閃光點(diǎn)層出不窮。綜合看來,有以下幾個(gè)方面值得關(guān)注: 1、精準(zhǔn)的用詞 描述蜘蛛網(wǎng)伸展-stretching;利弊二元-duality;資深的-veteran;上癮的-addicted;偽裝的-disguised;沉溺于-indulged in; 克制-restrain from;帶來便利-bring conveniences to 2、多變的表達(dá) 表示上網(wǎng):surf on line;on-line visiting;get on line;cyber-living;use Internet 溝通連接:communicate;connect; interpersonal communication;maintain face-to-face contact; approach others;direct contact 分開隔離:separate from;isolate from;maintain distance between one another;get alienated from;set a barrier;keep people beyond reach 強(qiáng)調(diào)肯定:undoubtedly;there is no denying that;after all 3、構(gòu)架式語句 第一段使用了As is vividly depicted in the picture進(jìn)行描述。第二段開始的The metaphoric and impressive portrayal has subtly revealed是大量作文可以使用的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)議論文表達(dá),適用于陳述象征寓意。第二段中分正反兩個(gè)方面論述時(shí),采用了On the one hand和 However, on the other hand這樣的結(jié)構(gòu)。第二段后面的反面論證采用了Once indulged inpeople feel reluctant to連續(xù)表達(dá)出沉溺于網(wǎng)絡(luò)的不良后果。第三段開始則直接用Therefore, it is necessary to得出文章的建議和結(jié)論。 4、句型變化 文章開始的倒裝式表達(dá)令人印象深刻,The past decade has witnessed an increasingly inseparable relationship between man and Internet. 中段的分詞表達(dá)如Being a veteran on-line shopper,和Once indulged in the fictitious world同樣呈現(xiàn)了語言的變化。 5、不定時(shí)并列結(jié)構(gòu) 例一:As a college student, I get on line everyday to discuss news with other people on BBS, to study English by registering for web courses, to chat freely through e-mails with my friends. 例二:After all, Internet is invented to connect you and me, and to bring conveniences to our life rather than set a barrier to keep people beyond reach.